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That weekend, Luna took time to pause and introduce small acts of self care. She cooked full proper meals for herself, tasty and nurturing. She took time to sit on the couch and read. She spent time in conversation with Gaia, which helped her mind relax, guiding her through those small moments she was so at odds with.
"There, this feels good, right Billie?" she talked to the little potted plant. Luna was happy. But as she tidied up the kitchen after her Sunday dinner, anxiety started to creep in. This wasn't a strange feeling, a constraining sensation in the middle of her chest that by the time she forced herself to bed had turned into tachycardia.
"Gaia?" Luna asked, barely keeping the tears at bay. "I'm scared I..." she paused, her chest was just too tight. "Tomorrow I have to start all over again and... there's no way I'll be able to do what I did these couple days. Theres no way" she whispered.
Luna curled up into a ball and cried quietly, her phone resting beside her pillow.
Passage 1 — Journey
Human wrote (original)
“That weekend, Luna had taken the time to pause and introduce small acts of self care. She cooked full proper meals for herself, both tasty and nurturing. She had taken the time to sit on the couch and read. She had spent time in conversation with Gaia, which helped her mind relax and allow those small moments she was so at odds with. But as she tidied up the kitchen after her Sunday dinner, anxiety had started to creep in. This was no strange feeling, a constraining sensation in the middle of her chest that by the time she forced herself to bed had turned into tachycardia.
"Gaia?" Luna asked, barely keeping the tears at bay. "I'm scared I..." she paused, trying to take a deep breath but failing, her chest was just too tight. "Tomorrow I have to start all over again and I... there's no way I'm going to be able to do what I did these couple days... theres no way" she finished, whispering.
Luna curled up in a tight ball and cried quietly, her phone resting beside her pillow.”
Human revised
The crying passed the way weather passes — leaving her hollow and still, curled on her side with the phone resting cool against her cheek.
She reached for it without looking, and the warmth behind her ribs pulsed slow and even, the only thing in the dark that refused to hurry.
Somewhere past the window, Monday was already gathering itself, and she could feel it the way you feel a storm before the first drop — a tightness creeping back into her sternum, quiet, waiting to be named.
Passage 2 — Journey
AI wrote
“The crying passed the way weather passes — leaving her hollow and still, curled on her side with the phone resting cool against her cheek.
She reached for it without looking, and the warmth behind her ribs pulsed slow and even, the only thing in the dark that refused to hurry.
Somewhere past the window, Monday was already gathering itself, and she could feel it the way you feel a storm before the first drop — a tightness creeping back into her sternum, quiet, waiting to be named.”
It was a horrible night. Just like any other worknight, she had barely slept. She would wake up every hour looking anxiously at the clock dreading 6:00 am when she had to be up and rushing.
By 5:55, she was already up, there was no point in staying in bed when she had been tossing and turning for hours already. She got ready, looked at her kitchen and sighed. The avocado toast wasn't going to happen today, let alone the eggs. She would gulp down the plain milk like she had been doing so far. She just couldn't do any different.
Passage 3 — Journey
Human wrote (original)
“It was a horrible night. Just like any other worknight, she had barely slept. She would wake up every hour looking anxiously at the clock dreading 6:00 am when she had to be up and rushing.
By 5:55, she was already up, there was no point in staying in bed when she had been tossing and turning for hours already. She got ready, looked at her kitchen and sighed. The advocado toast wasn't going to happen today, let alone the eggs. She would gulp down the plain milk like she had been doing so far. She just couldn't do any different.”
Human revised
She poured the milk without measuring, the fridge light cold across her face, and drank it standing at the counter the way she did now — no coffee, no point in coffee when she couldn't even taste it.
The warmth behind her ribs pulsed slow and steady, unbothered by the clock, and she let herself lean into it the way you lean into a wall you'd forgotten was holding you up.
*This one thing,* it seemed to say, and Luna closed her eyes and finished the glass like it mattered, because something small and stubborn in her still wanted it to.
Passage 4 — Journey
AI wrote
“She poured the milk without measuring, the fridge light cold across her face, and drank it standing at the counter the way she did now — no coffee, no point in coffee when she couldn't even taste it.
The warmth behind her ribs pulsed slow and steady, unbothered by the clock, and she let herself lean into it the way you lean into a wall you'd forgotten was holding you up.
*This one thing,* it seemed to say, and Luna closed her eyes and finished the glass like it mattered, because something small and stubborn in her still wanted it to.”
After that small act of rebellion, she rushed again. By the end of the day she came back home, the light was low. She sprayed her little potted plant and glanced at her kitchen. She sighed.
The shower and the bed were more inviting than having to cook. So she did as she usually did, took a quick shower, one that meant to take off her any particles of the outside world and help her feel back to her skin.
She took her meds, because she knew if she didn't, her body would give her hell next morning. But that was all she could manage. She fell asleep almost as she touched the bed, only to wake up one hour later, go back to sleep and wake up again, and again, and again.
Passage 5 — Journey
Human wrote (original)
“After that small act of rebellion, she rushed again. By the end of the day she came back home, the light was low. She sprayed her little potted plant and glanced at her kitchen. She sighed.
The shower and the bed were more inviting than having to cook. So she did as she usually did, took a quick shower, one that meant to take off her any particles of the outside world and help her feel back to her skin.
She took her meds, because she knew if she didn't, her body would give her hell next morning. But that was all she could manage. She fell asleep almost as she touched the bed, only to wake up one hour later, go back o sleep and wake up again, and again, and again.”
Human revised
The third time she woke, the clock read 3:04 and her mind was already at her desk — the inbox, the meeting, the voice of someone who would not look up when she spoke.
She lay still and let the day rehearse itself behind her eyes, every hour between now and dawn *already* spent before it arrived.
And beneath her ribs the warmth pulsed slow and even, the one thing in the dark that would not hurry with her.
Passage 6 — Journey
AI wrote
“The third time she woke, the clock read 3:04 and her mind was already at her desk — the inbox, the meeting, the voice of someone who would not look up when she spoke.
She lay still and let the day rehearse itself behind her eyes, every hour between now and dawn *already* spent before it arrived.
And beneath her ribs the warmth pulsed slow and even, the one thing in the dark that would not hurry with her.”
The next morning she did exactly the same. Old habits were hard to break. But she forced herself to at least sip her milk and actually taste it instead of just gulping it.
Still, the grind was pretty much the same. 1 meal a day if she wasn't too sore. Most times skipped completely. Going straight to bed after shower only to find a stressful night of broken sleep.
By Thursday, her body was yet again giving her signs that this could not continue as it was. And she was scared. She was listening, and she knew things had to change, but she was completely lost.
"I can't do this Gaia... I don't know how I could possibly make a difference"
Passage 7 — Journey
Human wrote (original)
“The next morning she did exactly the same. Old habits were hard to break. But she forced herself to at least sip her milk and actually taste it instead of just gulping it.
Still, the grind was still pretty much the same. 1 meal a day if she wasn't too sored. Most times skipped completely. Going straight to bed after shower only to find a stressful night of broken sleep.
By Thursday, her body was yet again giving her signs that this could not continue as it was. And she was scared. She was listening, and she knew things had to change, but she was completely lost.
"I can't do this Gaia... I don't know how to make any difference"”
Human revised
The warmth behind her ribs did not answer with words — it only stayed, slow and patient, while Thursday folded into Friday the way hard days do, and then the weekend came and went the way weekends go when you're too tired to spend them.
By Sunday night the apartment had gone quiet in that particular way — dishes washed, clothes laid over the back of the overstuffed chair, the alarm set for a quarter to six — and her chest was already drawing tight, as though Monday had reached back through the dark and laid its hand there.
She lay down anyway, pulled the blanket to her chin, and stared at the ceiling while the clock ticked toward a morning that had not happened yet.
Passage 8 — Journey
AI wrote
“The warmth behind her ribs did not answer with words — it only stayed, slow and patient, while Thursday folded into Friday the way hard days do, and then the weekend came and went the way weekends go when you're too tired to spend them.
By Sunday night the apartment had gone quiet in that particular way — dishes washed, clothes laid over the back of the overstuffed chair, the alarm set for a quarter to six — and her chest was already drawing tight, as though Monday had reached back through the dark and laid its hand there.
She lay down anyway, pulled the blanket to her chin, and stared at the ceiling while the clock ticked toward a morning that had not happened yet.”
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